Comrade Ixabert wrote:Yeddi wrote:Weed isn't a drug, it's a way of life for millions.
irrelevant.
Stop using that fucking word so many fucking times smart ass.
It just got to me. Geez... I hate that word now. FUCK I HATE WORD irrelevant.
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What do you mean?
These form "Team Demon", which is a special force the purpose of which is to fight off evil.
He also created Wingman, Pantheraman, and Antman.
Price Empire (could be just because I know you, but please DON'T call it that)
Power Force Ultra
Best Soldier Harry
Bourgeois Spider (Not a good name for any character in a childrens book. Subtlety would be an asset here)
He lives in the North Pole.
You DO realise it is written for little kids, right?
Price Empire (could be just because I know you, but please DON'T call it that)
Bourgeois Spider (Not a good name for any character in a childrens book. Subtlety would be an asset here)
As well as that, as I said as this is a childrens book the content, plot, etc needs to be complicated enough that the reader doesn't feel patronised while the language needs to be accessible to younger readers.
So he's Santa, then?
I know someone who'll like that.
Ix, I suggest you redraft it. The subject matter is too wide, and with characters like Plato, the children are going to be lost. The dialogue also needs to be made shorter, so that each character only speaks a line or two.
Oh, and get rid of the paedophilic remarks while you're there.
Comrade Ixabert wrote:
You DO realise it is written for little kids, right?
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I know someone who'll like that.
Who?
Children love gore and blood.
Yeddi wrote:Comrade Ixabert wrote:
You DO realise it is written for little kids, right?
It's written for little kids but you have damn hard words like Bourgeosie, that's just hard for anyone not familier with it.
To be honest, i havn't read it. You started going on about elephants
Comrade Ixabert wrote:They can hear very low-pitched sounds.
I know someone who'll like that.
Yeddi wrote:I think Jesse should write a childrens story too, "Freddy the Fascist" or something like that. If i remember correctly he's a pretty awesome writer.
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