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Poem#128783

By Comrade Ogilvy - 18 Mar 2004 17:50

- 18 Mar 2004 17:50 #128783

Last edited by Comrade Ogilvy on 23 Mar 2004 18:02, edited 1 time in total.

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#128937

By Gustav Fluffy - 18 Mar 2004 21:39

- 18 Mar 2004 21:39 #128937

"Unless thunder strikes, a peasant won't cross himself" - Russian proverb

For every Gustav, there are ten Fluffys.

#128938

By Gustav Fluffy - 18 Mar 2004 21:41

- 18 Mar 2004 21:41 #128938

Mmmmmmmmm, try SUBTLTY next time.

"Unless thunder strikes, a peasant won't cross himself" - Russian proverb

For every Gustav, there are ten Fluffys.

#128944

By Gustav Fluffy - 18 Mar 2004 21:45

- 18 Mar 2004 21:45 #128944

Poems are meant to say something. Every time I read this, it says less and less. Try contemplating the human condition next time; it might be a little less pretentious than what you've just written.

"Unless thunder strikes, a peasant won't cross himself" - Russian proverb

For every Gustav, there are ten Fluffys.

#128963

By Comrade Ogilvy - 18 Mar 2004 22:14

- 18 Mar 2004 22:14 #128963

Thanks. I'll take that critique with me and work on it

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#132302

By Cragov the Dry - 22 Mar 2004 18:18

- 22 Mar 2004 18:18 #132302

I have to conclude even though the subject is powerful... what actually is the subject! :?:

Also i can't seem to follow the pattern of rhyme and lanquage used!

#132346

By Der Freiheitsucher - 22 Mar 2004 19:08

- 22 Mar 2004 19:08 #132346

No better than watching paint dry.

#132349

By Comrade Ogilvy - 22 Mar 2004 19:11

- 22 Mar 2004 19:11 #132349

Last edited by Comrade Ogilvy on 23 Mar 2004 19:10, edited 1 time in total.

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#132355

By Truth-a-naut - 22 Mar 2004 19:18

- 22 Mar 2004 19:18 #132355

Then don't pretend there's some sort of intristic meaning.

#132710

By Steven_K - 23 Mar 2004 01:17

- 23 Mar 2004 01:17 #132710

That sounds like typical teenage blood and despair poetry. No beauty in the destruction. No offense, just my honest opinion.

#133190

By Al Khabir - 23 Mar 2004 19:50

- 23 Mar 2004 19:50 #133190

"All that I wrote on table or wall
with a foolish heart and foolish scrawl
was meant to add a little grace
You say: "The hands of fools deface
table and wall-one must erase
all he has written, all!!

I'd like to help as best I can:
I weild a sponge as you recall,
as critic and as waterman.

But when the cleaning up is done,
let's see the super-sage emit
upon the walls sagacious shit!"